pulling off memories

[machinery]

my eyes wind around

her long face, thin black eyes
let me see excitement under
those clothes

but it's nothing to your
red cheeks
on your short mystery
her lips don't glisten like
yours once did.
I can't bother to look
at those lips (of yours)
anymore.
Your walk away
broke me down.

It's time to pull this skin off...

[parch]

i wish you didn't stop at "its time to pull this skin off"..although it does leave me hanging. i'd rather it continue. so pull it off.

[Hannibal]

good, this one caught me with an elbow to the nutsack. Nice. I agree with parch on the fact that it should be a bit more elaborate, but at the same time, i love it when a poem leaves me burning for more. Makes me eager to read more. Good job.

[parch]

hannible may be right.. the need for more does give this a lot of allure. once again.. great work.

___---parch

[machinery]

maybe it's time to pull the skin off, but I don't want to, and I don't feel like it ( in actual life) rather, i would just sit and dwell, lean on the thoughts that come to mind...and just wither.....moving on is so hard to do.